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We keep a home
Of unknown hums
And lonely cats.
The sky cracks but
He lacks a raincoat.

Fueled by smoke and
Words he lands on
A branded street,
Knows the sweet rage
Of meeting too soon and late.

This town belongs
To a song man
And wrongful ghost.
He is most sure
The coast will fade their remnants.
The yadu is a Burmese poetry form I've grown to love due to its concise lines and climbing rhyme scheme. This is my first attempt at a yadu, written about my housemate two days before he left town.
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Given 2013-03-15
Moving: A Yadu by ~Vivid-Ellipses A wonderful example of the Burmese fixed form Yadu. ( Featured by Beccalicious )
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Treasures-Of-Wisdom Mar 15, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Very neat, and congrats on the Daily Deviation!
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Aquarius-Claire Mar 15, 2013  Student Writer
I adore this. By the way, it reminds me of this character named Nakata in a the book Kafka on the Shore.
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Congratulations on the well deserved DD!
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neurotype Mar 15, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
This is a really interesting structure, thanks for the introduction to it :)

I liked the first stanza most because it's the most compact, and I think most evocative of a single moment.
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Flane-kanja Mar 15, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I've never heard of this style of poetry before. I read it out loud though and was astounded at the movement, rhyme and rhythm of the words. Beautiful. I very much enjoyed it.
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brain-tree Mar 15, 2013   General Artist
This is beautiful and truly fascinating to me. I've never heard of this style before but goodness me I'm getting excited just thinking about the possibilities already. Thank you for sharing this with us all. And congratulations on the DD. It's always lovely to see literature features, they are so few and far between.
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T0XICFR0G Mar 15, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I LOVE the raincoat line at the beginning C:
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lintu47 Mar 15, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Congrats on the well deserved DD! :dalove:
Have a nice day! :heart:
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This is incredible! How do you make this structure sing so much? I love your words.
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